Wrote a script and have a cast… what do you think?

Question by joey: Wrote a script and have a cast… what do you think?
I have written a script with my friend and we plan to turn it into an independent movie. Here is a sloppy summary of it. Tell me what you think.

We open with three guys in a car and they are robbing the money off of a truck that is transferring money. A cop had followed them and begins to shoot at them and then it blacks out. We see two of the guys from the car, Brian and Jack, a year ago. These are the events that lead up to that day. They are told by a guy that they work for to find some information. They beat a guy and kill him for the info. But a cop, Vincent, is on their tail. Brian and Jack find out how much money their boss is making, and quit. They decide to sell weapons themselves. They get into the arms business through another friend, Jim, who is in the police but he is also doing deals of all sorts of things on the side. He fills him in on the cop Vincent, who works for Jim on how much Vincent knows. At the same time, Jim is leading Vincent off of their trail to protect them. Brian and Jack start to use too much power and Jim warns them to stop taking over the business in the city. Brian is shot that night after fighting with Jim and Jack thinks it was Jim. They go out on their own, and get caught and go to jail. When released, Jack plans to rob that truck and Brian agrees. They make peace with Jim, who helps them rob. We come back to that day before and see that Brian is having second thoughts. We find out that Jim is caught by Vincent about his deals, and he wants money to leave the country forever. They decide they need to do this, and get the money and start driving. They are followed by Vincent into the woods and other cops. There, Jack and Jim were shot. They were both killed and Brian went on to serve life in prison while Vincent was praised for catching them.

I know it’s long, but it’s just the sloppy version. There’s a lot more to it. I would like honest opinions. Thanks.

Best answer:

Answer by Dev M
Thinks it’s good honestly, just make sure that there is alot of depth and purpose to it and it will be fantastic ^n^

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